Thursday, December 1, 2011

in place



i'm thinking and feeling the great fullness of walking
beside someone else
in their entirety


8 comments:

R. Burnett Baker said...

I want to hold to the hope of the second stanza. But considering the events of the day past, I can only look to it as a prayer....

Elisabeth said...

'Melded hands' has both positive and a slightly worrying ring, but I enjoy the idea of hands held together for a time.

erin said...

there's not a spare inch of space in this poem. fullness, beside, entirety. this could be walking with god, or love, neither one dwarfed by the other.

(i wonder if you have changed the poem. second stanza?)

xo
erin

steven said...

erin - it was a much longer piece of writing that just minutes ago i pared down to what i really feel. i'm astonished that you would know. it just felt like a show before i changed it. steven

Reya Mellicker said...

It is a great feeling, isn't it, shoulder to shoulder with someone who is completely present? Rare and beautiful.

Valerianna said...

Gosh, I so relate to the conversation between you and Erin. I learned a lot about writing somehow with this one piece I was working on. I got that it was not flowers or decorations or anything else that would make the piece - or ANY pice of writing for that matter - but the pairing down to the most essential and direct words. It was a huge ah HA. Not being "trained" as a writer, I got how to tweak, mend, compost and ultimately let things sit before I could really know. Like making a painting...

steven said...

reya yes!!! - it's breath taking and life affirming. steven

steven said...

valerianna - i'm not trained as a writer either, in fact one of the pieces i undertook with the golden fish was to write each day and to hold the intention of becoming a better writer than i was. in an environment where there are so many incredible and talented writers it becomes even more necessary to be available to what i am reading and then to hold the hope that something of their extraordinary skills rub off on me. for that i can extend my gratitude to you valerianna!!!! steven